Torbyn N : WALHT form sentences

Friday, June 11, 2021

WALHT form sentences

This piece of writing is my explanation of how electricty gets to your home.

1 comment:

Miss Mikayla June 18, 2021 at 6:13 AM
Morena Torbyn,
Great explanation writing, you can make this a strong piece of writing by adding a conclusion. Don't forget to go over your work and recheck your punctuation.

I enjoyed reading this explanation, I can see your writing is improving.

Keep up the great work!
Love Mum x
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Bula! My name is Torbyn. I go to St Mary Catholic School in Gisborne. My family is from New Zealand and Fiji. I live with my Dad, Mum and Sister. I am good at running, swimming, horse riding and hunting. I like playing with my friends in the sandpit at school, riding a jet ski and four wheeler motor bikes. I also love looking after my puppies and axolotls. This year my goals are to have quality blog posts and to stay on task in class. This year I am looking forward to being a strong kaia in Kapa Haka, getting better at Horo Hopu, doing my best at athletics and representing Blue House/Mary McKillop. People who inspire me are teachers at school because they help me learn new things, my dad because he's a good hunter and I want to be a great hunter like him, but even better!